Link to Evelyn’s work: https://literaturetalk.home.blog/2019/08/25/realism-vs-idealism/comment-page-1/?unapproved=5&moderation-hash=78fdebd66ef4a6aab96cb4dd2614ea8a#comment-5

Hi Evelyn, I really enjoyed your analysis of the two authors as you clearly have a good understanding of their writing and how Henry Lawson is a “realist”, whereas Banjo Paterson is an “idealist”. You have provided good insight regarding their work and a clear justification as to why you prefer Lawson’s writing. I think you could have structured this in a different way to make your argument better, and essentially easier to understand. Perhaps including the quotes in your paragraph rather than putting them at the end? or splitting this into two separate paragraphs, focusing one on Paterson and the other on Lawson. Also, watching your punctuation and editing your work after writing may also assist in bettering your argument (use of commas, apostrophe ‘s’ when saying ‘Lawson’s poetry’, capitalisation of ‘I’, etc). Overall, you have done some great analysis of this week’s readings, and have made efficient comparisons between the two authors, thus competently answering the question. Looking forward to reading more of your blogs 🙂